As a mega storm started in the distance, it looked like a big white black hole eating everything in its path. As it got closer and closer, you could hear the screams in the mist as people runing in fear and trying to get away from the storm. You could see the fear in people face as they run away. As the rain came in pouring down in bucked loads, then the hurricane came sucking up everything as houses and trees and cars all get sucked up as the storm. But there was nothing left of the small city.
By Jeremy
Wednesday, March 5, 2014
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Good work Jeremy
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I love your similes! Some really great sentences here. I think 'bucked' was a typo? Lots of good description. Try and think of some other words to use instead of 'and'. Have a play with how you can structure your sentences to avoid overusing it.
ReplyDeleteWell done,
Ria