Friday, September 20, 2013

The storm

As I walk home from school It begins to rain, ahh! Im going to get soaked I think to my self! About 10 minuites later I hear thunder, I look up and then I saw a bright light …. That’s not thunder? A big spaceship levitates over me. I start to run but get lifted off my feet by something. Just like in the movies I say!? Im in a room that’s pitch black then I fall into deep sleep after something pinches me. Im in my bed, at my house,  in my pajamas? I must have been dreaming, but then I saw a bright light outside oh no!.

By Asia

2 comments:

  1. Hi I reckon you used good descriptive language but the story was a bit muddled and the plot messy
    Xander

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