I woke up at 3 o’clock in the
morning half asleep when I saw it. It was bright blue with shining red lights.
As I walked towards it started to get brighter and brighter until I could barely
see. And then I saw it the most amazing thing I ever saw. It was gigantic,
scary but fantastic all at the same time. I didn’t know whether to smile or wet
my pants. It was a UFO in my backyard. Then I heard my mum come. I told her
what had happened and she said I’m imaging things. Maybe not to much sugar
tomorrow
From Tom
Well done Tom, this is a great story. To further improve it look carefully at your grammar and sentence structure.
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you should have smiled and maybe not had so much sugar that day and mum may have believed you thats a cool story
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