As the train flew off the rails and into the ditch, we were all lifted from our seats and hurled across the carriage as it hit a tree. Panic ripped through me and then I saw a bright light. I thought I was going to die. I was unconscious for a while then, when I opened my eyes the light started to fade away and I thought to myself. 'Am I in heaven?' Then I saw that I was on the blood stained grass in front of the train. When my life flashed before my eyes I truly thought I was going to die.
By Amber
Hi Amber
ReplyDeleteGreat story and I wonder what you saw when "your life flashed before my eyes".?
Re read your first sentence - I think you need a bit more punctuation for it to make sense. Read it out loud and you'll see what I mean.
Great stuff.
Glen
youre still alive thats the good thing
ReplyDeleteit almost sounded true, is it?
from jewel
well at least your still alive nice language
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