It was a miserable night, the Dark Star Express was at full steam screaming down the worn out wooden and metal tracks. As the train swerved around the rocky cliffside the carriages groaned, but inside the carriages was not a pleasant sight, it was gloomy, lifeless and silent very silent but the only sound you could hear was the coughing of orphans heading for the orphanage. But as the train entered the tunnel bats flapped and a strange kind of fog started to strangle the train until it stopped moving and sadly the orphans did not make it to the orphanage because the train was never to be seen again..........
By Portia
Portia you did a really great job of writing, very good plot line and lots of nice descriptive words that made it very easy to picture. I love the way you wrote, "a strange kind of fog started to strangle the train" - great imagery! Awesome job using the prompt - keep it up!
ReplyDeletethat was an amazing story Portia. that was so sad. what happened to the train?
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Wow!! What amazing use of imagery! I love the way your words, although grim, are able to paint such a vivid picture of the event unfolding. Simply Fabulous! I look forward to reading more of your entries.
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