One day i was sitting on the couch and mum came rushing through the door and said pack your bags were going on holiday ,1 hours later were off on holiday to , wait i can tell you because i don’t know where we are going cause mum hasn't told me yet i asked she said “Australia’’ i said “but where could i go first’’ mum said “anywhere’’ so we got to the hotel in aussie mum gave me 30 dollars and i said “ i’m off to go find a mall and explore through it’’ it took me 3 hours and i came back with …. to be continued
by temeka :]
Hi Temeka,
ReplyDeleteGood on you for having a go at the 1ooWC and using prompt in your text. I think it would be great if you read over this again and see if you take it to a new level by concentrating on your punctuation. This would make it easier for the reader to follow your story,
Keep writing and sharing,
Mary (Team 100WC)
Australia