I think Lucy should go to school because she has a disability, she should get to go before people who don't. Its like here in NZ its not fair if I cant go to school because I cant walk properly.40 If she dose not go to school she wont know how to look after her self when she is older, then she will have to live with her mum forever. Its not fair if all Lucys friends go to school and she dose not because of a little disability. So I think Lucy should go to school and live the life of a normal kid.
by baydn.
Thursday, May 22, 2014
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Hello Baydn,
ReplyDeleteYour opinions are very heartfelt and impassioned. Both of those qualities are wonderful choices for a persuasive writing piece.
The inequalities that you have pointed out in your writing bring up many solid points for consideration.
My suggestion for making your writing even better is to take another look at your use of apostrophes. Contractions should have an apostrophe to take the place of the letters that were left out.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts,
Gina Felton (Team 100, Iowa USA)