As the
weather man told New Zealand about the huge storm that was coming everybody was
preparing for what was explained as the worse storm ever!! .As the storm was
rolling in it wasn’t as bad as the weather man explained, in fact it was hardly
anything this big violent storm everyone was ready for was a scam. The weather
man over exaggerated. He got fired the next day, no news station wanted him he
was a scam, so he moved into politics, he sucked at that as well, so he went to
MacDonald’s to get a job that didn’t need any skill.
By Angus
What an interesting take on this prompt Angus. Although it's a clever idea you did end up being a bit repetitive as you didn't use different ways of describing your poor weatherman's career changes. I thought that this was a missed opportunity to make this a very good piece of writing
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Hi Angus,
ReplyDeleteWell done on attempting this weeks challenge. I really liked the start of your work and thought it was building to something exciting, but I was really disappointed with the ending! It seemed rushed and not well thought out. Also remember to re-read your work, you have some missing punctuation, that would have helped the flow of your writing.
For the next challenge try to make every word count!
Hi good story Angus.
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