Wednesday, September 10, 2014

Zane

I was walking in the park one day, when I saw a big patch of flowers. They were all purple. My friend came up beside me and said “what lovely flowers.” I said “look at that oddly coloured flower.” So we went over to it and it was a yellow flower in amongst all the purple flowers. “But it is yellow,” said my friend, “I mean it’s a bit stupid planting a yellow flower right in the centre of a big group of purple flower.” We decided to forget about it and carried on walking.

By Zane        
Posted by room5 at 10:17 AM

2 comments:

  1. Lisa Team 100WC London, UKSeptember 15, 2014 at 5:25 AM

    Hi Zane,
    I enjoyed reading your short story. I liked the way that you used dialogue to move the storyline forward. You have used the prompt really well, well done.
    Lisa Team 100WC London, UK

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  2. Miss DarrochSeptember 21, 2014 at 7:15 AM

    Hello Zane!
    Well done for completing the challenge. I can really picture in my head the flowers in the park. I agree with
    Lisa too that you've used dialogue effectively. Keep up the great effort!
    Miss Darroch, Team 100WC, UK

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